First presentation come from representatives of China. In the event China also show that there are calligraphy, we also listen several countries share the experience, we also got the knowledge of language and education information. We are also saw dance from Spain salsa dance. Spain bring teachers to show how to dance salsa. The teacher also invite those who want to join and there are lecturers, college students and high school students who participated.
There are many countries that will introduce and present the language and country. Example such as Indonesia, Spain, China, France, Germany, and Dutch. So we can know more about the countries of Europe and Asia. Many people are excited about this event. There are also sessions of games that will get the prize. Questions about the country and the history of famous people from the state of the country. Thank you for reading and bye guys.
Glad that you enjoyed the event hehe..
ReplyDeletenew knowledges are needed yeah ?
I might have some correction there in your paragraph and sentences. I think you should pay more attention on using the past tense in this recount text because I found so many verbs which are still in the present tense like " there are calligraphy" it should have been " there was calligraphy" and so on.
What an awesome experience.
ReplyDeleteDid you join the salsa? Because the salsa was really cool. I'd like to give a bit of correction. This event was an event which happened in the past. You should use past tenses to it,so your writing may not confuse the readers. You mixed past tense and simple tense like this sentence "we are also saw dance from....". If you meant this sentence as a passive form you should write it " we were also showed......" or " we also saw..." if it meant as a past tense form. I think that's all, overall this writing is cool and I hope you don't get offended by my correction hehehehehe.
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ReplyDeleteNice writing :D
ReplyDeleteBy the way did you enjoy the event?
maybe you can add more details information and I think you made a few mistakes for the example in paragraph two. Overall you are great!
I think Gisel was correct. Your writing is good, you arranged the chronology well, but You should pay more attention on using the tenses. In fact, it was an event that was held in the past. So, we must use past tenses there, bro.
ReplyDeleteBy the way, why don't you give more detail of the event?
You can make it longer using your own feeling about the event you gathered in, and also you can put some photos there to make your blog more colorful.
I think that's all from me. I am sorry if there are some words that make you mad.
I hope you can give feedback on mine, too.
See you there
John, i do definitely agree with the corrective feedback from your folks: that details would have made your writing more elaborated, and a bit more careful attention on basic grammar rules is to be conducted next time.
ReplyDelete;-) Keep on practicing, John!